Love these Southern style directions: "walk towards the setting sun until you reached the sea, and then turn left"
Hahaha: "well, maybe not wandering, but certainly not marching efficiently"
Oregon trail, desert style: "they’d lost countless hours treating injuries after falls, treating illnesses, not to mention stopping for three funerals…"
To be sure, not a task for the faint of spirit: "keep everyone around them calm in times of trouble"
Riiiight, probably...: "Probably just a bad dream."
Noooo: "dripping with the same mucky red water that the meat maker man had all over him."
Ohhhh, yeah doesn't make me feel any better: "Liliti says"
💜: "only to live on in so many of their memories"
I love the indirect character development happening in this chapter! You tied the action in so masterfully with the main story while setting us up to care about the trouble on the way.
Great change of pace, I think, and really enjoyed the sting in the tail at the end.
What I like is that the characters are not dumb. They don't do stupid shit and don't ask stupid questions. I like their open mindedness that the girl could be a seer or something but their hard headed and matter of fact dealing with the reality of what it probably is.
Oh man, I like completely forgot about the whole village walking away. This is a great chapter, revisiting the brutality of Kareva that first moment. And now we’ve got two excellent high-stakes stories to follow
Love these Southern style directions: "walk towards the setting sun until you reached the sea, and then turn left"
Hahaha: "well, maybe not wandering, but certainly not marching efficiently"
Oregon trail, desert style: "they’d lost countless hours treating injuries after falls, treating illnesses, not to mention stopping for three funerals…"
To be sure, not a task for the faint of spirit: "keep everyone around them calm in times of trouble"
Riiiight, probably...: "Probably just a bad dream."
Noooo: "dripping with the same mucky red water that the meat maker man had all over him."
Ohhhh, yeah doesn't make me feel any better: "Liliti says"
💜: "only to live on in so many of their memories"
I love the indirect character development happening in this chapter! You tied the action in so masterfully with the main story while setting us up to care about the trouble on the way.
Great change of pace, I think, and really enjoyed the sting in the tail at the end.
What I like is that the characters are not dumb. They don't do stupid shit and don't ask stupid questions. I like their open mindedness that the girl could be a seer or something but their hard headed and matter of fact dealing with the reality of what it probably is.
Great work as ever.
Thank you, brother. Always a pleasure to hear your take on this thing. (Not just because you like it, either!)
Double-chapter finale two weeks from today.
Oh man, I like completely forgot about the whole village walking away. This is a great chapter, revisiting the brutality of Kareva that first moment. And now we’ve got two excellent high-stakes stories to follow
Two-chapter finale on Jan 29…
Greatly appreciate your attention, brother.
Oh boy oh boy. When will the next in the saga be ?
I’m still writing it haha. I’m maybe 60-70% done?
Ahhh good good… goooood. Don’t wanna go through too intense of a withdrawal.