I love the opening POVs where we get to see our heroes through the opposition's eyes.
Love: "another message to the Pohyor from their crazed butcher chieftain, using a few men he didn’t like as the conduit."
They never do: "He had no choice but to assume that the warlord’s son was, again, not listening."
Forgive me if I've forgotten, but does ul- mean "son of" or something along those lines?
Not today, Bhorda! "Suddenly the warrior in black dropped to one knee and lifted his sword in the air."
Glorious: "He saw Metan-Ohta, somehow steps ahead of his company, take on two of the Pohyor at once, laughing and screaming his defiance." "keening out a vicious, bloodthirsty joy"
Chills: “You have my respect,”
Damn it, archers!: "stray arrow from the ledge."
:) "Which arm do you mean"
Awww, bud: "Makava’s chin drooped for a split second"
Snort laugh: "Toruk often daydreamed about stabbing Uskol himself"
Of course he did: "but first he asked for the Daughters of Vei by name."
Looooove: "He raised an eyebrow and smirked. “Killing a tortoise.”"
Okay, another thing I'm loving is how we really only get flashes of what Kareva looks like through the eyes of those for whom he is the last sight ever seen.
Okay, this is what we're here for - this is rip roaring stuff and it's reading like you have poured volumes of classical battles into this one Mexican standoff. This is one chapter that felt too short, all of the choppy paragraphs and staccato sentences give actual violence to the encounter but it's a hellva lot of fun to read.
Line of the chapter though:
He raised an eyebrow and smirked. “Killing a tortoise.”
Damn dude, this chapter scratched such a deep, tactical itch, I love it. A battle scene that is exciting and complex but still easy to follow is so hard to do, and you nailed it.
Thank you so much, brother. Planning this one was a bit of a bastard—I actually didn’t know how to resolve Round 2 believably until five minutes before I started writing it! The series had a different title originally haha
I love the opening POVs where we get to see our heroes through the opposition's eyes.
Love: "another message to the Pohyor from their crazed butcher chieftain, using a few men he didn’t like as the conduit."
They never do: "He had no choice but to assume that the warlord’s son was, again, not listening."
Forgive me if I've forgotten, but does ul- mean "son of" or something along those lines?
Not today, Bhorda! "Suddenly the warrior in black dropped to one knee and lifted his sword in the air."
Glorious: "He saw Metan-Ohta, somehow steps ahead of his company, take on two of the Pohyor at once, laughing and screaming his defiance." "keening out a vicious, bloodthirsty joy"
Chills: “You have my respect,”
Damn it, archers!: "stray arrow from the ledge."
:) "Which arm do you mean"
Awww, bud: "Makava’s chin drooped for a split second"
Snort laugh: "Toruk often daydreamed about stabbing Uskol himself"
Of course he did: "but first he asked for the Daughters of Vei by name."
Looooove: "He raised an eyebrow and smirked. “Killing a tortoise.”"
Okay, another thing I'm loving is how we really only get flashes of what Kareva looks like through the eyes of those for whom he is the last sight ever seen.
Sigh: "Sivridi paced quietly"
Man you make me so happy with these highlights. Thank you so much!
And yes, “ul” is “son of.”
I thought so, but I wanted to be sure. Great chapter!
Okay, this is what we're here for - this is rip roaring stuff and it's reading like you have poured volumes of classical battles into this one Mexican standoff. This is one chapter that felt too short, all of the choppy paragraphs and staccato sentences give actual violence to the encounter but it's a hellva lot of fun to read.
Line of the chapter though:
He raised an eyebrow and smirked. “Killing a tortoise.”
Brilliant stuff!
Bless you. So glad you enjoyed. And to be clear, the boys are not quite done yet.
Oh, this feels like a few chapter of hand-to-hand - looking forward to the next chapter, it's now getting super fun to read.
Dang! You were telling me you were working on a big battle scene, but now I see why you were saying it was a challenge. All. The. Perspectives.
This was crazy, fun to read carnage!
I like this line best:
“The impetus of her lunge drove them both over the edge of the cliff.
🔥
Dude! So glad you enjoyed it. There are a few more twists to the tale coming up over the next few weeks. We’re not done with this battle just yet…
Thanks so much for reading! Enjoy your holidays.
Damn dude, this chapter scratched such a deep, tactical itch, I love it. A battle scene that is exciting and complex but still easy to follow is so hard to do, and you nailed it.
Thank you so much, brother. Planning this one was a bit of a bastard—I actually didn’t know how to resolve Round 2 believably until five minutes before I started writing it! The series had a different title originally haha
Oh, really? What was it going to be called originally?
I respectfully decline to answer this question hahaha (it was not good)
Fair enough, that is a very relatable feeling 😆