Really liked this. Great world building and I found the characters and dialogue to be gritty and real. My only cries would be: shorter chapters please and would be nice to have some female characters.
Wow, that was intense. This is not my typical genre, but I enjoyed it. It grabbed me and took hold of me. That is what great writing does isn’t it. I could see this as a movie. (We need some new ones)
Ok, this is freaking epic Tom! It’s giving Dune vibes in the best possible way, with the strong world building and conflicted characters. I am here for it!! Kareva is terrifying!
Incredible opening chapter—rich worldbuilding, sharp political tension, and a protagonist who’s both terrifying and tragic. Kareva’s emergence as a leader is brutal and unforgettable. The final scene with Varyta’s death adds a haunting layer. Can’t wait to see where this goes. This saga feels like something special already.
Woah – that was – wow. What a great chapter 1. It's such an intriguing setup for a clearly well-thought out world. The action was excellent and the bouncing from POV to POV to give different takes on the same scene was brilliant. Consider me hooked.
Appreciate you, brother. Glad you’re enjoying it so far.
Really liked this. Great world building and I found the characters and dialogue to be gritty and real. My only cries would be: shorter chapters please and would be nice to have some female characters.
Not cries - crits
If you’re sticking around for the next chapter, you’ll get at least one of those points resolved…
I read the first chapter of The last of the Etela. I enjoyed it. It was quite action packed, so kept me on my toes. It would be great as a movie
Thank you so much!
You are very welcome Tom
Also, should go without saying but just in case… thank you so much for reading!
Hey, I enjoyed it. Definitely more the side of Patrick Roffhuss (fantasy wise) which is a sector of fantasy that I think is really lacking.
For the record I am a very reticent fantasy reader so the fact that you got me hooked on tone is massive.
I’ll take that 100% of the time.
Wow, that was intense. This is not my typical genre, but I enjoyed it. It grabbed me and took hold of me. That is what great writing does isn’t it. I could see this as a movie. (We need some new ones)
Solid beginning! I look forward to reading more.
Appreciate you! Excited to hear what you think.
I’ll definitely comment as I read.
Really immersive, compelling stuff. Proud of you dude.
Excellent— very intense and engrossing, I second the comment on the crisp dialogue, it brought me in.
Thank you so much, man! Greatly appreciated.
A gripping first chapter. Excited to read more.
Thanks so much!
Ok, this is freaking epic Tom! It’s giving Dune vibes in the best possible way, with the strong world building and conflicted characters. I am here for it!! Kareva is terrifying!
Yeah. Poor kid has some stuff going on haha. Thank you SO MUCH. I appreciate you.
Incredible opening chapter—rich worldbuilding, sharp political tension, and a protagonist who’s both terrifying and tragic. Kareva’s emergence as a leader is brutal and unforgettable. The final scene with Varyta’s death adds a haunting layer. Can’t wait to see where this goes. This saga feels like something special already.
Gripping. Brilliantly told. Love a central character with mad, violent tendencies!
Woah – that was – wow. What a great chapter 1. It's such an intriguing setup for a clearly well-thought out world. The action was excellent and the bouncing from POV to POV to give different takes on the same scene was brilliant. Consider me hooked.
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OH HELL YEAH! 🔥🔥🔥 Great build up to an insane scene with so much beautiful violence!
🖤🖤🖤 plenty more where that came from 🤣